Week 2 - WINOL: News Editor - Package Feedback

COMPASS - Chief Reporter - Matt Spencer
This lead the bulletin because it was the most recent and freshest news we had. You overlooked and managed the entire meeting very professionally, turning this story around really quickly in a day. You found a news angle about sexual offences increasing which moved the piece on from just being a puff piece about the meeting being held in our own studios. Big credit to you for arranging the event, you have continued to deliver and built up a trusting relationship with these contacts.

SCHOOL TEST - Education Reporter - Emma Wright
You did really well to get access into a local school, you got some good cutaways ensuring that you didn't identify any of the children so well done for abiding by the laws of consent. You have a good lead into the interview with the head teacher, and balance with the statement but remember rule of thirds you could zoom in tighter to her face.

BEES - Environment Reporter - Ellen Millard
This was a good follow up story with new advances on research, you scripted well to your pictures and it was visually interesting - lots of cutaways, good use of archive footage and the framing of the interview with the scientist is faultless. Love the PTC at the end of the piece, it's entertaining for the viewers that you are in the uniform, only criticism is it's over exposed - crouching down by the hive away from the sunlight would of been better.

OOV Belt - Nadine and Alex
The announcement of UKIPs candidate for the European election in London was canceled so it was a shame that you couldn't go down and film as originally planned. But you still delivered the results with archive footage from Eastleigh elections. Although the horse clip was filmed off an iPhone it was good initiative from Ellen to film it.

COURT - Crime Reporter - Tom Wright
This story received a lot of media attention so you did really well to get into the packed public gallery! All the legal requirements were passed and you managed to get a mugshot to positively identify the defendant - ideally it would have been good to get a photo from police of the victim. Good PTC outside court, shame it couldn't be on location. You did slow down from last week, but you need to slow down a bit more so the viewer can digest what you are saying. Visuals with court reports are often minimal so I like the use of a reconstruction.

STOPTOBER - Health Reporter - Zeena Alobaidi
I was extremely pleased with this package, you really illustrated the story well. You really followed what I asked for and delivered an opening sequence with both wide and close up shots. I like the creativity for the stats with the smoke in the background but next time include where you got the figures from on screen. Well done on securing the interview with a local nurse, you got lots of cutaways of her at work which allowed you to lead into your interview smoothly. Remember rule of thirds, get in closer as there was a lot of background space, and don't forget to white balance the camera. You included a case study which is what the piece needed, but ideally it would be more trusting if it wasn't a student.

CRICKET GROUD - Business Reporter Harvey Taylor
This news piece would have been higher up in the bulletin but because it was sports related I kept it before sport. Good access on to the cricket grounds and you got plenty of rushes of the building work to illustrate the story. Well done on getting an interview with Councillor Keith House I know no one from the construction company wanted to be filmed but ideally the only thing missing was to hear from the cricket fans.

BABY ZEBRA - Community reporter - Lucy Wilson
This was the perfect 'and finally' as it was a lighter news piece, you got lots of cut aways of the new baby zebra, but a lot of them were mid shots so think about getting varied wide and close up shots. Good job on getting an interview with the zookeeper, to lift the piece some vox pops would of worked naturally. You have narratively scripted this piece well and you have a confident PTC at the end of the piece, but avoid comment e.g 'sense of excitement in the air' this is what we want to hear from the visitors.

Overall, this week went well, and there was a good mix of stories adding light and shade to the bulletin. There was definite improvements on audio and visual from the week before and the new reporters have a clear idea of what elements need to be included in a package. Continue to think hard about scripting, and have an idea of what your link is going to be early on so when it comes to voicing over your packages you don't repeat what was said in the link. Packages are only going to get better as the broadcast quality improves, don't be afraid to order the subject around to get the shots that you have planned ahead.